Some people think watching sports is waste of leisure time. What is your opinion?

Part of the society is of the belief that watching sports is
misuse
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a misuse
of spare
time
. The factors which
are contributed
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contribute
to
above statement
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the above statement
are that it can
cause
health
issues and addictions. I
partially agrees
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partially agree
am partially agreeing
have partially agreed
with
this
statement Because watching sports
can be have
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can have
positive impact
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a positive impact
on a person’s life.
Such
as it can be helpful someone to
buildup
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build up
a personality as well as different skills and it can be build motivation within an individual. Nowadays people are more prone to watch sports. Sports are supposed to keep people healthy and active. Watching sports for a long
time
sitting
can be
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can cause
cause
various types of
health
issues.
For
example obey
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sixty. Obesity is a major problem where it can
cause
many more
health
issues
such
as diabetes and hypertension.
Leisure
time
is a
time
where it has to be
use
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used
as a stress reliever
,
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,
rather than spending on watching sports they can
spen
pass time in a specific way
spend
spin
span
a quality
time
with friends and family. Watching sports can be beneficial as well.
For
example it
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example, it
can be a motivation for people where they get temptation to be more active and spend their
leisure
ti
in the direction of
to
,
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e in a valuable way.
Such
as play one of the sports.
More over
in addition
Moreover
, watching sports can develop a person’s
skills
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skill
,
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,
fro
example
leadership skills
,
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,
companionship skills
,
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,
not only by watching but
also
implementing as well. In conclusion
,
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,
there are two sides to
above statement
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the above statement
.
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.
Where is watching sports on
leisure
time
can be
cause
negative impact in a
persons
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person's
valuable
leisure
time
,
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,
for
example
by getting
addiction
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addicted
addicting
and
also
can be
cause
health
issues. It
also
can be
use
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used
as a useful method to spend
leisure
time
by learning about leadership skills and social skills and
also
by getting
motivate
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motivated
to be
involve
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involved
in a sport as well. It’s partially agreed that watching sports can be a waste of
leisure
time
.
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