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some people think that going to a fitness center regularly is unnecessary.Instead,they believe that combining occasional exercise(such as for walks)with a balance diet is enough to stay healthy to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays having an august
health
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 has become an essential key for survival on earth.Many folk beliefs that going to a
gym
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 or fitness club will improve their
health
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.Others reckon that a healthy
diet
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 followed by a morning walk will creates a humongous effect on
health
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.Personally
,
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I agree with the statement
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 of all many people has a dilemma of either they should go to a
gym
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 or make a routine of daily jogging and balanced
diet
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.
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, various people opt to go to
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gym
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the gym
a gym
 because of many commercials which shows the optimistic results of joining them
,
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but it is actually the opposite in many cases as people usually do intake of protein powders and steroids while going to
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gym
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the gym
, Which not only damage the
muscles but
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muscles, but
also
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 swell the chances of heart attack if overdosed.
On the other
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hand yoga,running and a balan
ced
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concern, therefore
diet
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 are natural remedies and does not have any side
ef
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the gym
fects
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,it has b
een o
a relation that provides the foundation for something
basis
bserved that people going to jogging are m
ore healthy
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healthier
 and fit compared to those going to
gym
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 and using supple
ments
to gain with effort
achieve
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 accorging to a survey by university of south carolina,the resigned WWE wrestlers usually prefer natural
diet
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 because it helps them to maintain their
health
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 more than drinking protein shakes and heavy weight lifting Conclusively,fitness is a matter of grave concern
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 many people who shifted from going to
gym
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 to do yoga on regular bases and sometimes going for a walk are living more
health
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 and ecstatic but still it is believed that in order to achievve something

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