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Fast food is now universally in most countries and is becoming increasingly popular. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. What are your opinions in this?

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There are various different perspectives on the issue of fast
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. Some people believe that
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 kind of
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 has a positive role to play in the world because of its convenience and low cost;
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, I would argue that it is harmful both to the people who eat it and to society at large. There are two main reasons for
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, it is a well-known fact that eating too much fast
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 is extremely unhealthy. Foods
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 as fried chicken, hamburgers and chips contain a great deal of fat and salt, which cause major health problems like high blood pressure, obesity and heart disease,
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 I certainly agree that fast
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 is both cheap and convenient, the illnesses it causes when we get older are very expensive and it is the taxpayer who often has to pay for
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 treatment.
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, many fast
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 restaurants advertise to children in order to influence their future eating habits. The McDonalds clown is a good example of
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 kind of advertising. Ronald McDonald’s bright clothes and smile are clearly designed to attract the attention of children, who
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 push their parents to take them to McDonalds. I believe the restaurant does
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 because it feels that children who grow up eating in McDonalds
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 provides playgrounds and holds children’s birthday parties to get busy parents through the door. In conclusion, I once again restate my view that fast
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 has a negative effect on our lives because of the health programs it causes and the way that fast
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 chains try to change the eating habits of children.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity epidemic
  • Processed foods
  • Nutritional value
  • Chronic diseases
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Economic impact
  • Job creation
  • Environmental degradation
  • Sustainability
  • Dietary habits
  • Consumerism
  • Mass production
  • Public health
  • Health-conscious
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