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Nowadays, more and more people are finding about their family history, why ? is it a positive or negative development.

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In
this
 day and age, people are really curious to know about their ancestors and family origin. In my opinion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 consider it as a positive step towards the formation of better informed society. There are a variety of reasons why people prefer to gain information about their family history.
To begin
 with, having a deep insight about the origin, individuals can better understand their traditional culture which is the primary reason for their interest in finding about their ancestral history. As a matter of fact, it is the best way to be connected with traditional customs, in order to sustain own identity in terms of social values.
For example
, Mughal cast feel pride when they come to know that their forefathers were great warriors in past times.
Thus
, it can be argued that people endeavour to gain knowledge of their family to be well informed with respect to their cultural traditions.
This
 is definitely beneficial for individuals as well as for whole community for numerous reasons.
Firstly
, it is indispensable to save own culture in today's world because whole earth is becoming a global village thanks to the advancement in technology.
For instance
, young generation from every part of the planet are influenced by western culture which pose an imminent threat to the existence of minority cultural aspects. If people would be well informed about their roots, they would never accept the traditions of other societies.
Therefore
, it seems to me that it is obviously advantageous, particularly for youth to have information about their past. In conclusion, by analysing above viewpoints it is completely clear that people are eager to know about their history and it is Vital in order to thrive socially.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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