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Some people believe children should get homework everyday, while others think they should not. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Education is a very
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 exigency part of our life. If
children
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 or youngsters do not get a good education, it will be devastating to their lives. Whether or not
children
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 should receive
homework
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 every day is a matter of debate. Some people believe that
children
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 should get
homework
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 every day from school and
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, some people believe that
children
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 should not get too much
homework
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 from the academy. Both views will be discussed in
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Firstly
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, we must understand the concept of
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. The teacher is not able to cover a full course in
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 so
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they give an assignment to
children
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.
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, most of the students are not doing their
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 unless it is necessary, so it is important to give them
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.
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, some subjects need practice.
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, science, mathematics, and art need constant practice, if they do not, it is very difficult to understand for them. By giving
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 it automatically helps to improve. Practice makes perfect.
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, it is important to give
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 to youngsters, but
children
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 spend 7-8 hours at an institution, after institute if a teacher gives too much
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, it pressurizes many
children
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.
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this
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, when the
children
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 get too much
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, they are not able to do any other physical activity which is
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 important in their lives. And it is
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 depreciation. In my opinion, the concept of
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 is not harmful. The problem arises when a teacher gives too much
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 and when a student fails to use their time wisely.
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, if the deadline for a specific assignment is after 2 weeks, most students would leave it until the very
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 they are putting themselves under unwanted pressure. In conclusion, I think
children
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 should get
homework
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 for their improvement.

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task achievement
Consider elaborating on both sides of the argument equally to ensure a balanced discussion.
coherence and cohesion
Aim to use more transitional phrases to enhance the flow of ideas and clarify connections between points.
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Try to include more specific examples or data to support your arguments and make them more compelling.
structure
The introduction clearly presents the topic and outlines both perspectives, setting the stage for a balanced discussion.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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