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Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

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Educational organizations are crucial for
people
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 who attend, especially
schools
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, which build up the knowledge of most academic
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. Day
schools
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 could not be the case for everyone,
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 the idea of boarding
schools
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 has been launched, but some believe that these type of
schools
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 is an extraordinary chance for the young generation.
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 essay will discuss the debate, and give a concluding view. On the one hand, those who support
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 form of education promote the idea of easier communication. It appears that when
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 who go to these kinds of academic places turn out to have easier communication
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 the similar place for living and studying they have. As an example,
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 friends especially the boarding kind tend to turn into friends for life.
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, it seems that being in
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 place helps a lot with the amount of energy and time. It is logical
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 that the time of transport to the location of living and the energy is going to be saved because of the similarity of the place.
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,
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 appear to save up their money because they do not have the extra cost of the
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 bus.
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, proponents of boarding
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 cite that these places could make
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 feel a sense of depression. if
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 do not get
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 their classmates or roommates, it could double the burden which is the lack of presence of their family. The record could easily show that the number of bullies in
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 type of
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 continues to grow alongside the number of kids who will have different
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 of mentality issues.
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, when youngsters step into society, they feel left out because of the years they were cut off from the world at the boarding
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. Examples could be seen in the number of
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 who are in quarantine
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 the feeling of unsafety and insecurity. In conclusion, I would tend to side with opponents of boarding
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. It seems reasonable that
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 be and grow with their family so they could later enter easily into society. It seems not logical to say that
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 give up on these benefits to have the point of being able to communicate more easily and save some money.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure the essay has a clear structure, including a distinct introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Use clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to state the main idea and ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main point related to the essay topic.
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Develop your arguments more fully by providing more specific examples and explanations to support your points. This will make your essay more persuasive and engaging.
coherence cohesion
Be careful with spelling, punctuation, and grammar. While not excessively penalized, minor errors can detract from the overall quality of your essay.
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In the conclusion, succinctly summarize your arguments before stating your final stance. This reinforces the essay's structure and ensures the reader is left with a clear understanding of your viewpoint.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • structured environment
  • holistic development
  • extracurricular activities
  • independence
  • responsibility
  • navigating social interactions
  • academic facilities
  • emotional development
  • isolation
  • socioeconomic divisions
  • strict regime
  • creativity and individuality
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