The population of many countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared to the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweighs the disadvantages.

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In many nations, the number of adolescence is more than the elders.
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discuss about how higher productivity is the primary advantage of
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talk about how lack of wisdom is the main disadvantage of it, before drawing a conclusion that the advantage outweighs the disadvantage. The main benefits of young people
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that they increases productivity levels in countries. In
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age group, men and women still have relatively a stronger physics, which allows them to work longer hours and endure from higher pressure than older people.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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