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In britian, when someoen gets old they go o live in a house with other old people where there are nurses o look aftr them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

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Now a
days
Suggestion
day
, it can be seen that the number of old
age
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 centres being
runned
move fast by using one's feet, with one foot off the ground at any given time
run
 by the
govenment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
are rapidly increasing
Suggestion
is rapidly increasing
 in
United Kingdom
Suggestion
the United Kingdom
, where old people are being kept and nurses are appointed for their
care
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. I strongly believe that the
govenment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 should financially support
such
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 old
age
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 homes.
Firstly
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,
govenments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
are supported
Suggestion
is supported
 by their
tax payers
someone who pays taxes
taxpayers
.
Tax payers
Suggestion
Taxpayers
 are those people who have paid their taxes to
governemnet
Suggestion
the government
government
governments
 for about 60 years, are including the people who have served their nation in different field of life for which
govenment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 should pay for their health
care
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 once they are in
the old
Suggestion
older
 homes.
Secondly
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, a huge number of people can not afford health
care
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whic
interrogative pronoun, used both substantively and adjectivally, and in direct and indirect questions, to ask for, or refer to, an individual person or thing among several of a class
which
 they receive in old
age
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 houses.
Governement
Suggestion
The government
Government
runned old
Suggestion
ran into old
ran old
around old
 homes are being proven a great blessing for
such
Linking Words
 families and individuals who live under the line of poverty even in developed countries like France and
Germany where
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Germany, where
 Government funded
oldage
Suggestion
old age
 homes are taking
care
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 of the elder citizens which in return making the society
,
Accept space
,
 a civilized one. To sum up,
goverment
Suggestion
the government
government
 should raise the bar of
finacially
Suggestion
financial
financially
 support for
such
Linking Words
 institutes which are a blessing for retired senior citizens who in
absenc
Suggestion
the absence
absence
 of
this
Linking Words
can not
can not
cannot
 afford
such
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 a private health
care
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 which
os
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
is
beng
the state or fact of existing
being
 given in old
age
Use synonyms
 homes.

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