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University students are increasingly studying aboard as a part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying aboard outweigh the disadvantages?

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There are a lot of university students that are studying abroad as part of their university studies. In my essay I will write the advantages and
desadvantages
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
disadvantage
 of studying abroad.
In addition
 to
this
 statement I can say that studying abroad
give
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gives
 you the possibility to see how other student are learning. There are a lot of students that
studies foreign
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studies, foreign
 languages and
durring
all the way through
during
 their
studies they
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studies, they
 go visit one of the country that the language they are
study
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studying
studied
.
Furthermore they
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Furthermore, they
 have the
chance
 not only to learn the language but to see
the the
definite article
the
 culture of that country.
Moreover studying
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Moreover, studying
 abroad gives the student the
chance
 to become more independent and to know himself.
For example
 a student that goes to Japan to study telecommunication will have the
chance
 to learn to make new friends
,
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,
 to adapt himself to a new country
,
Accept space
,
 new culture
,
Accept space
,
 new cuisine. At the glance all being young and studying abroad gives you the
chance
 to open your eyes and to discover yourself. Another example that I can give is
of
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about
 myself. When I
stared
take the first step or steps in carrying out an action
started
 studying in
Uk
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the UK
UK
, I saw
that is
 another learning system better
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 the one that I was used
with
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to
.
Finally studying
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Finally, studying
 abroad can make you feel sometimes lonely as students are far from their's families and their friends, as much as the
tehnology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
 has
raise
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raised
 and we can speak and see people from
arround
in the area or vicinity
around
round
 the world, not seeing your closed ones can be very stressful. In conclusion the
chance
 that students that study abroad is unique as they will have
a
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an
 open view about other countries and they can choose what to do with their future carriers.
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