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Band 6.5

Write letter to you neighbor. You have had a problem with your next-door neighbor. You have not been able to speak about this problem to your next-door neighbor

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to say about a problem that I faced during 2 weeks living there I am not able to say when I met you in an elevator and I do not want to disturb you by coming to your home.
Firstly
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, I moved to
this
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 apartment two weeks ago. The flat number is 25/13 which is next to yours. I live there with my husband and we have a little daughter as well, she often sleeps at around eight at night.
Thus
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, the first thing I would like to draw your attention to is the noise that you provide by listening to music frequently at night by column which is extremely loud.
As a consequence
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, my daughter could not sleep well
as well as
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 she feels annoyed and cray quite often.
In addition
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 to
this
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, your children usually fling the rubbish in our entrance, I see
this
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 from the camera which is located inside our door.
Furthermore
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 break down the plants, which stay next entrance. I think that you will understand me and my feelings pertaining to
this
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 situation. To resolve the problem I would appreciate it if you could not turn on the music
such
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 loud after six or seven o’clock
as well as
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 tell your children
that is
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 not normally what they do and it is able to make neighbours angry. I hope you will take the best solutions in
this
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 case. I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Susana

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task achievement
Consider improving the clarity of your opening statement and make sure to specify your concern about the noise at the beginning.
coherence and cohesion
Try to structure your paragraphs more clearly, with each addressing a specific issue or request. This will help maintain coherence.
coherence and cohesion
Review sentence structures for clarity and grammatical accuracy, especially in longer sentences.
task achievement
You addressed the letter to your neighbor and expressed your concerns respectfully, which is a positive aspect of your writing.
task achievement
The letter is written in a formal tone, which is appropriate for the situation and reflects well on your intention to communicate politely.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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