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What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving school at 16 or 18 to work instead of going to university?

#school #work #university
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Last
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The last
 ten to twenty years
young
Suggestion
younger
 people or teenagers are tend to get a job just after the
school
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 at the age of 16 or 18,
however
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 their classmates
are decied
Suggestion
are deciding
are decide
have decided
are decided
 to go to university. I think that there are some advantages and disadvantages of leaving
school
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 to work. As for me the major disadvantage is that they leave
school
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 before
graduate
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graduating
, so they would not get their diplomas of secondary education. In these circumstances they could get some simple job with
low salary
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a low salary
. As soon as young people
usially
under normal conditions
usually
 have no
expirience
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experience
experiences
 or some special knowledges they could pretend for some basic position.
On the other hand
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 a teenager would get financial independence in
this
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 case and it is the main advantage, I think.
For example
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, my friend got
really good job
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a really good job
really good jobs
 offer from the well known software company when he was in grade 11. He
decieded
recognizable; marked
decided
decide
 not to leave
school
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 and I believe he did in a right way.

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