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Some people think that the government should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. What do you think?

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Although
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 most people believe that it is the government’s duty to take care of the
environment
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, others think that every human being must be responsible for it.
This
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 essay will discuss both of views and give my opinion. On the one hand, some people think that the state and central authorities need to take care of the
environment
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. In fact,
individual’s effort
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the individual’s effort
 can not make a difference and government who
needs
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need
 to carry out or make conclusions, which help to save
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environment
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the environment
.
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, the government should introduce laws to limit emissions from factories;
thus
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, they are all in the best position
to
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until
 they make big changes for the betterment of nature.
On the other hand
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, others believe that if everyone starts taking a small actions, it can make a huge difference. They think that the government is responsible for big
issues but
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issues, but
 if people course of action like taking care by doing a few tiny things differently it can protect our planet.
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, people should choose to buy a product with less plastic packaging, in
this
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 manner, will help reduce pollution.
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, a small resolution of human beings might help in controlling the pollution caused by non-biodegradable waste. In conclusion, while people’s opinion may vary in their opinion, I think by small effort of people is more significant in saving the
environment
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.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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