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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 day and age, young generation is the base of any nation as an effect they have an important role in the civilization, so for their self building, individuals said that some charity task to be included in their high faculty programmes. I strongly argued that the government should take action related to unpaid job in community for youngsters.
Firstly
, in the age of high school, students need to build their self confidence and experience by doing unpaid duty. By having
this
 confidence, they do not have to rely on parents and having jobs independently, they can tackle their problems of life, for
this
 government should start programs, campaigns and workshops in the school teach them.
For example
, a recent research shown that many countries started programs and unpaid internships to train the students for their respective a professional field. By doing
this
, they can have more exposure to their related fields of work.
Secondly
, by doing free projects in public, it will help the young generation to become socially responsible. They interact with the individuals and can get motivated by their life experiences which can be how to interact with folks on their jobs etc. They will help handicapped people, cleaning the local roads as well as working in old age homes, later on, it will help them in professional life.
For example
, some students stop their education at the high school level, so
this
 experience will help getting a job in hospitals as well as factories or as a labour. In conclusion, I believe that unpaid task in society will be more beneficial for that these programs should be a compulsory part of a higher secondary institution.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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