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Some people want governments to spend money looking for life on other planets. Others, however, think this is a waste of public money when there are so many problems on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

Some argue that public funds should be directed toward exploring the possibility of
life
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 beyond Earth,
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 others believe that
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 efforts are wasteful in light of the urgent issues humanity faces at home.
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 some people believe that investing in the search for extraterrestrial
life
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 is a step toward scientific progress, In my
opinion
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 focusing on solving problems on our planet is a more practical and ethical use of public money. Earth is currently facing urgent crises
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 as climate change, poverty, food insecurity, and healthcare inequality. Investing in these areas directly improves quality of
life
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 and protects future generations.
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, funding renewable energy projects can help reduce carbon emissions and slow global warming.
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, Funding can be directed toward environmental conservation, sustainable agriculture, and waste
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 all of which help preserve the planet for future generations.
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, one significant drawback of investing public funds in the search for
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 on other planets is the enormous cost involved, which often yields uncertain results. Space missions require billions of dollars, yet despite numerous explorations, no definitive evidence of extraterrestrial
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 has been found to date.
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, Mars rover missions,
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 scientifically valuable, have not confirmed any form of
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, making the financial commitment appear risky and potentially wasteful. In conclusion, public money should primarily be spent on solving the urgent problems facing our planet rather than investing heavily in space exploration.
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 is because the challenges on Earth are immediate and affect billions of people,
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 the possibility of finding
life
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 on other planets remains speculative and distant.

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Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and supporting sentences. This will make your argument stronger.
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Try to explain your ideas in more detail to help the reader understand your points better.
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Your introduction clearly presents both sides of the argument, and you have a solid conclusion that restates your opinion.
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You have good examples which help clarify your points.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented opportunities
  • extraterrestrial
  • satisfy human curiosity
  • practical benefits
  • inspiring goal
  • testament to human ambition
  • pursuit of knowledge
  • critics argue
  • imprudent
  • plague Earth
  • immediate attention
  • allocated for
  • environmental conservation
  • well-being
  • quality of life
  • balanced approach
  • advancements
  • benefits for humanity
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