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Some people prefer to live in hot climates, whereas others love the lifestyle in countries with cold climate. Discuss both the view and give your opinion.

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There are various factors impacting people to choose where they live and
climate
 is one of the primary reasons. Some people are attracted by hot
climate
, whereas others are happy to stay
at
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in
 cold areas.
This
 essay will analyse attributes (features) that make people inhabit different areas and provide reasons why I am keen in warm areas. There are numerous advantages of hot
climate
 attracting people. Perhaps the
first
 and foremost merit is that people can enjoy vivid lives. A good example of
this
 is that there are various outdoor activities and night activities,
such
 as swimming, cycling and staying club in the evening. On a weekend, individuals can hang out with friends to enjoy cycling in the morning, followed by swimming at a beach and ending up with drinks in a club. What a fabulous weekend. Another compelling reason is that the economy is better there. Considering people like to go out of
door
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the door
doors
, which increases total consumption and in turn,
boosts
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boost
 the economy.
On the other hand
, others love the lifestyle in countries with cold
climate
. Those who enjoy
ski
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skiing
 and exploration would like to stay in areas closed to polar regions.
In addition
, many senior people like to live in cold areas where provide clean and quiet places, and the work and competition are slow there. In recapitulation, I like warm
climate
 and think that
extremes
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the extremes
 of both hot and cold regions are not good. To illustrate, hot
climate
 is beneficial for the development of diseases while the economy is poor in cold countries.

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