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More and more people want to own items, such as cars, clothing and other things, that are made by famous brands. What are the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Many people aspire to possess products from popular brands. Whether it is a fancy automobile or designer clothes there is an inclination to opt for well known brands.
This
 essay will explore the reasons for
this
 trend and would derive at a conclusion. There are several reasons for
this
 emerging trend.
To begin
 with, effective promotions and
brand
 endorsements by famous celebrities leave a lasting impact to the consumer. They find a sense of emotional happiness when they buy the same
brand
 or outfit which their
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
celebritity
a widely known person
celebrity
 wears.
For instance
 owning a luxury car from the
brand
 Rolls Royce gives enough reasons for someone to flaunt the possession to their social circle.
Furthermore its
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Furthermore, its
 believed that branded products have a far better superior quality. To illustrate certain German car brands
have been advertised
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has been advertised
 to be very stable and sound in operating.
On the other
hand
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hand, this
this
 trend does not fare well
in
Suggestion
with
 some of the consumers.
Firstly
, friendships and relationships are established
at
Suggestion
in
 the wrong context as the liking is due to branded possessions. People tend to befriend only looking at the material possessions and not the personal attributes of the friend. To highlight people receive a lot of engagement
on
Suggestion
with
 social media when they post their pictures with
products
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the products
 of these brands. In
additon
a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
 to
this
plural of "this"
these
those
 consumers who follow these
brand
purchase
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purchases
 out of their purchase capacity tend to topple their personal finances since they opt for
loan
Suggestion
loans
a loan
 from banks. In
conclusion their
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conclusion, there
conclusion there
 are multiple reasons for
this
practice
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practice, however
however
 it surely has a negative impact since it drives emotional purchase behaviours and can lead to a respect
that is
 based not on skills but materialistic possessions.
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