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Some people think that when recruiting companies should aim to take on people who are innovative and able to work independently while others consider they should recruit people who are to work in a team and follow instructions. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #companies #aim #work #team #instructions
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According to some people, while selecting candidates, the companies should target the candidates who can
work
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 independently and the candidates should be innovative. While others argue that the companies should recruit the people who are great
team
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 worker and very obedient. I will be discussing both views in
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 essay. The companies should target the people who are innovative and able to
work
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independent
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independently
 because those people require the less resources which saves the ample amount of money and time of the particular
company
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. Innovative and independent people do the lot of research and discover the efficient and economical ways to complete the
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.
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Apart
 from that, as they are able to
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 independently so they do not require any additional human resources to complete the
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. The best example of
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 is Mr.
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Steeve
 Jobs, the founder of Apple INC.
who
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Who
 was innovative as well as
independent so
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independent, so
 he was able to make the empire of apple in the world by developing the revolutionary products
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Ipad
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iPad
IPad
pad
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Macbooks
etc
continuing in the same way
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 at very economical price. The companies should hire people who are great
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 worker and able to follow instructions because those people become
good
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better
 leaders and can be easily absorbed in the
company
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’s environment. People who are able to
work
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 in
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team
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a team
 and follow instructions, has good communication skills and they can
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 with anyone in the
company
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 so they can lead the other people
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this as
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this, as
 they follow the instructions so it is easier for the
company
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 to make them
work
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 as per
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company’s policy
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the company’s policy
. Though being from Non-computer background, Mr. Sundar Pichai the CEO of google has led to his
company
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 in top 3 companies of the world because he is
great
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a great team player
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 player and
very obedient person
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a very obedient person
. In the end, I conclude that companies should hire people who are
team
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 player and obedient because it helps the
company
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 to find the leaders and
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 people would lead the
company
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 on the top.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innovative
  • independent
  • creative
  • problem-solving skills
  • development
  • new ideas
  • solutions
  • productivity
  • competitiveness
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • communication
  • consistency
  • adherence
  • policies
  • conflicts
  • efficiency
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