Few countries think that people at the age greater than 30 years of age can do things like vote for country,marriage,getting driving license etc... ,while most of the countries oppose.What do you think?

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Most of the countries think that people should do matured things like vote for country
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marriage
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getting driving license etc.., at the
age
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of 30.Whereas few countries think that a little
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would be better.I totally agree with the way that few countries think. When people are allowed to do these matured things at the
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below 30
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they are in a situation to get into the world without the help of their parents
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These experiences make them matured in their ideas and thoughts.
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gains knowledge to select their own career
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life partner etc..
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They become smart enough to survive in
society tackling
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society, tackling
all the odds to
acheive
to gain with effort
achieve
beyond boundaries. Allowing them to do these things
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make them more responsible at a younger
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example if
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example, if
a 19
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year
old person is allowed to vote
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he will definitely know
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the
current political situation of his country.So having knowledge on these things
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he would do the better things a citizen could contribute
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to
the country's development. Many countries think that people may go astray if they are allowed to do these things at a
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.But
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the connotations
of it would be they are not ready to face challenges on their own
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unable to make right decisions in critical situations.And
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finally when
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finally, when
they regret for their mistakes
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they can't solve it.Because he may not have
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to correct it. If you ask me?
people
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People
at younger should make their own decision from 18 not later at 30.These decision making can happen only they are allowed
to do matured
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to mature
things at a younger
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and not exactly at 30.Considering the
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effects of doing matured things at the
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of 30
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I think the way that the few countries think was right (
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a younger age
younger ages
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before 30.

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