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Some people believe that factories and private tour operators should bear the cost of cleaning up environmental pollution, instead of the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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The consequence of growing older generation is countless, according to some.
This
 results in decreasing human resource of the world.
However
,
this
 can be effectively tackled by taking necessary steps and strategies to counteract the issues. The consequence of growing older generation is countless, according to some.
This
 results in decreasing human resource of the world.
However
,
this
 can be effectively tackled by taking necessary steps and strategies to counteract the issues.
Firstly
, those who are able to work even
aftre
happening at a time subsequent to a reference time
after
 the retirement age, should be allowed to continue to work because in
this
 way they can contribute to the state tax department. Every
students
Suggestion
student
,
furthermore
, may be educated how to save money for their
oldage which
Accept comma addition
old age, which
old age which
 probably, resulting, encourage them to save money,
this
 amount can be used when they getting old. Eventually, the government will be able to the
fund which
Accept comma addition
fund, which
 is
channlised
direct the course; determine the direction of travelling
channelised
channelized
 for the care of
older generation
Suggestion
the older generation
an older generation
 can be contributed to other more pressing issues: health, education, infrastructure.
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