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Famous people sometimes give their opinion on the public topic. Is this a good thing? Explain to what extent you agree or disagree?

#people #topic
People from different professions gets famous because of the new era of publicity and media. These could include the movie stars, singers, politicians and sports stars. Sometimes they take advantage of their popularity to promote values in the community. Famous people-like film stars, singers, cricketers live an
illusionary
life
 with little contact with the ground realities of
this
 world.
Hence
, sometimes they act like “A knight in shining
armor
protective covering made of metal and used in combat
armour
” and give their valuable suggestion about how to save the world.
Therefore
, I think it is completely out of context and should be avoided at all cost.
Firstly
, they earn an enormous amount of money and live an elite
life
 far from the ordinary people.
Therefore
, when they pinpoint some issue, they give unreal solution.
For example
, Mishaal Khan one of
best
Suggestion
the best
-known film star, suggest how every woman should work round the clock in her profession, which resulted in a huge outcry from the general public, because not everyone can afford to pay for the maids to do the house work and babysit. Ordinary female has to handle all chores of the house,
in addition
 to taking care of their children.
Secondly
, some celebrities give statements, which are totally contradictory to what they do themselves.
For Instance
, they raise the slogan against rape, while they wear negligible clothes and instill low moral values in the society, or they talk against the dowry while spending millions on their own weddings. On the other hands, some people who get
hype
Suggestion
the hype
 of fame are doctors, lawyers, politicians. These meet with people relating to every walk of
life
 on a daily basis. Mostly, who are in dire need of help and right now at the lowest level of their
life
 with depression and anxiety,
hence
, they have firsthand experience of people’s
life
. When they suggest some things for the betterment of society, it should be considered and tried to be implemented by all means.
For example
, Dr.
Shireen
Suggestion
Siren
Shrine
 is one of children specialist, if she gives her opinion about children
vaccination
Suggestion
vaccinated
 and hygienic issues, it should be promoted. In conclusion, various professions have different level of credibility against them, if they promote health, moral values and law, we should completely respect it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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