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How can be resolved problems related to migration of employees to developed countries. Obviously, there are many reasons why people prefer to move out of the home country.
Firstly
, most of the countries in the world do not offer adequate facilities to its citizens: social security benefits, infrastructures and minimum wages.
Additionally
, there is a less chance for career developments and promotions, even, they are qualified for it.
By contrast
, if these workers, especially, skilled workers, relocated to rich nations: the USA, the UK, and Canada will offer them with better career prospects and better living standards
Finally
, in many underdeveloped countries are severely affected with political unrests and corruptions. These all make people leave the country of origin for another destination for the bright future.
This
 flow of migration need to be prevented because
this
,
otherwise
, contributes a series of issues.
First
 of all,
this
 brain drain creates a shortage of skilled workers in the society, which affects many vital areas significantly.
For instance
, many training institutions may not find expert professionals to train their future generations.
Similarly
, in many countries, they provide free c
ompulsaoy
required by rule
compulsory
education for children,
this
 initiative requires a huge amount of investment
However
, these students do not work f
or
Suggestion
in
the country, when they reach the adulthood,
instead
 they migrate to other countries as where they are provided with better job opportunities..
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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