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Band 7.5

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, - describe the training course you want to do - explain what the company could do to help you - say how the course will be useful for your job Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Madam, I am writing to request permission to attend a training
course
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 called " Business communication skills".
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 is highly useful for my job as I have to deal with foreign customers. In
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course
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, there will be training about teamwork, enhancement of communication skills and public relations. The training will be for 2 months , and the class will be conduct in alternative days. I would appreciate it if the company could help me by paying part of my
course
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 fee and allowing me flexible working hours , as 2 days a week classes will be in the evening,but the rest of the classes will be in the morning. I will try my best to balance my job responsibilities and training. I believe
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course
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 is highly beneficial for our organisation as my work regularly involves communicating with customers and clients. It will help the rest of the employees as I will be able to share my knowledge and techniques with others to increase their working abilities. I hope you will think about it and consider my request, as it is beneficial for my career
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 for the organisation. Yours faithfully Khgjhvv

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add a bit more detail about the course time and place.
task response
Task response: Keep the tone more formal. Write 'Dear Madam' and end with your full name.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a clear order, but some lines are long. Use shorter sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Link ideas with simple words like 'also', 'because', and 'so'.
task response
Task response: You clearly say what course you want and why you need it.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
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