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As the number of cars increases, more money has to be spent on road systems. Some people think the government should pay for this. Others, however, think that the users should cover the costs. Discuss and give your opinion.

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The road system is now requiring additional investment since the number of cars is growing.
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, there is debate about whether the government or the
users
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 should take
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responsibility
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 the incurred cost.
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,
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both views and explain the necessary initiatives that should be taken by the ruling authority in
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 matter. In reality, the government not only has some authoritative rights
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 but
also
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 it is obliged to take care of the public affairs. Starting from
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fundamental rights
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 as employment, education and healthcare, to the improvement of the quality of life through a multitude of facilities, they hold a dutiful position.
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, the management of the surfeit of vehicles belongs to
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their duties too.
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, the public authority should implement the latest technologies
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managing
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 the expenses. Alternatively, what responsibilities
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users
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 have? The
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 should ensure the regular taxes
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 paid on time as the taxes comprise a major part of the national income.
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, a proper structure that ensures its
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to
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pay their taxes
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 time will suffice the role of car
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 associated with managing the cost of road development.
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, if required, tolling can be implemented upon availing the service of structures like bridges, tunnels and expressways, provided that they do not put a financial burden
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 the
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, the
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 steps will make the
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 more supportive
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 the authority
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 enable
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developing
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a
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well organised
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 taxation system.
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, the government should take care of the financial matters relating to the development of road infrastructure
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 support from its
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task response
The essay addresses the prompt effectively, discussing both views and presenting a clear opinion. Make sure to provide more specific examples to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
The essay is well-organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs discussing each view, and a conclusion. To improve, consider using transition words to enhance coherence between paragraphs.
task response
Clear discussion of both views and a well-explained opinion
coherence and cohesion
Effective organization with clear introduction, body, and conclusion

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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