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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Museums are important in every city, as they hold valuable heritage. Most of these infrastructures have a price to enter while the other's don't. There are pro's and con's to the cost management
system
, pro being without a fee, there can be more footfalls whereas if it's free it
also
 can lead to overcrowding taking the whole purpose of experiencing the menagerie in tranquility.
First
, if there is a charge involved to enter the place you will have only the people who are actually required entering.
In addition
 to that, you will have lesser people within the premise, allowing people to have a seamless and peaceful experience.
For example
 the Taraporewala
Museum
, which is an art
museum
 has a charge to enter which in turn helps people only who are interested pay and enter.
On the other hand
, if the structure has no entry fee, there are chances of it are diluting its value and having anybody in for a visit.
This
 can lead to overcrowding of the place and problems with managing crowds. The quality of people coming will
also
 take a hit with the free entry
system
.
For example
 a wax
museum
 in Lonavala has free entry and the amount of people within the
museum
 at any point in time acts as a Demotivator. I support a
system
 where people are charged for entering the
museum
 as that would give me the added advantage of going through the history of the statues a lot better. Bringing
this
 essay to a close the chargeable
system
 outweighs the disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Admission fee
  • Revenue stream
  • Maintenance
  • Overcrowding
  • Commercialization
  • Cultural heritage
  • Diverse attendance
  • Community ownership
  • Access to culture
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit quality
  • Cultural mission
  • Reliance on funding
  • Government subsidies
  • Cultural accessibility
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