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Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than of other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is inclined to believe by some people that it is vital to teach children the story of their own country rather than others. I partly agree with
this
 viewpoint.
First
 and foremost, learning own country literature is essential for a human life. Each person should know about
history
 well to use it for other purposes. So, one of them will feel the need in the case of choosing performance.
Secondly
, it is readily apparent that these days almost all students were obliged to study antiquity in universities. It becomes much circulated notion and in
this
 way students become informed from our
history
. All in all, I hold the opinion that learning own
history
 is a really beneficial and crucial subject nowadays.
On the other hand
, I
also
 tend to think that it is not as essential as it mentioned because in
this
 digital era a human was not owes to do thing whic
h one
Suggestion
things
a thing
the thing
 does not like.
In particular
, it is the major reason not to study own
history
.
Besides
this
, it is
also
 possible that that learning or exploring another country literature is more important and will lead to a vast number of successes, rather than own
history
.
In addition
 to,
this
 p
henomenon is much p
Suggestion
, this phenomenon
racticed and there are very few who will pay attention to
such
 rules which exist in these days. To sum up, it is believed by many that learning own
history
 is more important than of other c
ou
Suggestion
in
ntries. I guess that both overviews are true in half percent and a human should take into consideration and give some solution to
this
 problem without any discussion.
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