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Due to the influence of worldwide media such as television and computers, the gap between cultures is decreasing. The introduction of this global culture is a great benefit to the world. To what extent do you agree with this viewpoint?

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It is no doubt true that technology has reduced the size of the world. To
this
 effect, some are considering global culture has been beneficial to the continent. In my opinion, I totally disagree because it makes the place boring and the economy could be laid back.
Firstly
, imbibing a single custom globally could make the entire land uninteresting.
That is
 to say, nothing would fascinate anyone on the other side of one's present location.
Although
 in the past and currently, people looked and are looking forward to going to places to explore the tradition of others but, when
this
 is synchronized, the excitement and morale would be deadened. Due to these unpleasant outcomes, it would be preferable to continue to have diversities of culture.
Lastly
, the financial status of the world might crumble.
In other words
, funds realised from tourism
as a result
 of people travelling to places will decline when culture is amalgamated. Since there would not be any new experience on the other side, neither an excitement not fin to catch, citizens will remain where they are and a huge amount of money will be lost as
this
 unfolds.
For instance
, the Ministry of Tourism in Nigeria reported that the money Nigerians spend on travelling alone is about 65%of the total budget for the year.
Therefore
, the countries enjoying these funds would longer do when the harmonization is affected,
hence
, a decrease in the economy of
such
 places. In conclusion, in spite of people's views about the importance of globalization of the traditions I have a contrary opinion because of the fact that traditions will be extinguished the and it might be a disservice to the economy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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