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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this.

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In many countries, after a long years of studies, young students tend to have a year
gap
 between finishing high
school
 and starting a college.
This
 essay talk about both advantages and disadvantages of a
gap
 between the high
school
 and a college in the following paragraphs. To commence with, the two main advantages of taking a
gap
 between
school
 and university are it provides refreshment and makes young people more social human beings.
Firstly
, After twelve long years of
studies student
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studies, student
 find themselves a break and keep the student out of stress.
Secondly
, students can find the way to improve their communication skills
,
Accept space
,
 be confident and their self esteem will be in a paramount.
In other words
, they can cope with the life situation effectively.
On the contrary
, huge time break can be one of the prominent cons by encouraging students to take a
gap
 year. Despite of the fact that it gives more refreshment, the unusual break might dull ones' mind.
For instance
, there is a connection between high
school
 curriculum and university curriculum, so taking a huge time space may impact ones' studies
.
Accept space
.
Finally
,
this
 makes the scholars forget whatever they learned in high
school
. In conclusion, taking the time
gap
 has both pros and cons in a student life, specially the
gap
 between high
school
 and university studies.
However
, taking some space in life can make a person learn different things apart from their daily schedules.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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