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Public libraries should only provide books and should not waste their limited resources on expensive high-tech media such as software, videos or DVDs. Do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #books #waste #resources #media #software #videos #dvds
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It is considered by some that public libraries ought to offer books only rather than advanced means
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 videos and DVDs
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 In my opinion
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 I disagree that libraries should only offer books for public as other high-tech media are very useful due to reasons I will outline below
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 A good reason why high-tech media are essential in modern libraries is that there are many scientific content that can only be found in the form of videos
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 soft
copiesof
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copies of
 books or audio materials
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 is that many
authors
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 provide their books in the form of soft copies rather than
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 copies as it is easier to spread through
internet
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the internet
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 can be protected by passwords so as to protect their
copy rights
a document granting exclusive right to publish and sell literary or musical or artistic work
copyrights
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 Nowadays
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 we can find most new books as soft copies with much
ease
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easier
 than finding
paper
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 books
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 Another point to consider is that technology allows many libraries to have huge collections of books
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 videos and audios in very small space because
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 unlike books
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 it can be saved in small memory cards
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 hardwares or DVDs
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 there are millions of books saved in
Alexandria library
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the Alexandria library
 in Egypt in a small room where visitors can ask for the book that they need and read it easily on the computer screen
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Finally
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 High-tech media are cheaper than books because it does not need expensive
materials
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materials such as paper
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paper
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 ink or
machinnery
machines or machine systems collectively
machinery
 that are used to make books in
paper
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 form
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For instance
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 a
paper
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 book called
Harison
English actor on stage and in films (1908-1990)
Harrison
 manual in internal medicine worth $ 200
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 while it is available online as a soft copy for only $30
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Therefor
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Therefore
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 libraries can provide
larger number
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a larger number
 of books other material for very low cost
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 In conclusion
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 I disagree with the opinion saying libraries should only provide books because other forms of modern materials provide a wide range scientific content in different high-tech forms
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a small space
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