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Write about the following topic: In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, due to busy schedules, people tend to give less time to their families. Aged people are always left out in conversion in family and always advised by family members to take
care
by
Suggestion
of
 themselves. Due to
this
 behaviour, parents go to old
age
 homes to find peace. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the importance of spending expenses by family members rather than the
government
. In old
age
 homes, nurses take
care
 of old
age
 people. If the
government
 is spending money on taking
care
 of old
age
 people,
then
 there can be many drawbacks.
For instance
, nurses won'
t
 take good
care
 of people. They can behave differently with old people since they won'
t
 be answerable to anyone.
Nurses
Suggestion
The nurses
 won'
t
 be serious in their duties. They might even misuse their job duties
such
 as not maintaining the proper time in their shift. If there is a shortage of funds from the
government
, every old
people
Suggestion
person
 will be affected. If
family
Suggestion
the family
 starts paying the nurses,
then
 in return nurses will be answerable to
family
Suggestion
the family
. They have to take proper
care
 of people. They can'
t
 blame anyone if found of not doing her job properly. Family members can take feedback on nurses and advise them where they can be improved. In
this
 way, the family feels secure that their parents are happy and have no problem. In my opinion, the family should take
care
 of their member's expenses as it has many advantages discussed above.
However
, if the family is not able to meet the expenses,
then
 the
government
 should
also
 regulate certain schemes so those family members are
also
 benefited.

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