The government should lower the budget on the arts in order to allocate more money to education. To what extent do you agree?

It is clear that,
art
in many ways represents a mirror to the
society
and has great cultural significance.
However
, many people believe, the government should stop funding the
art
projects and redirect
this
budget to develop the educational system of our country. I personally do not agree with
this
argument, and through
this
essay I will support my views with examples. A strong educational system leads to the
upliftment
and growth of a
society
.
For example
, the main driver behind the industrial revolution of 1800's, was because of the educational reforms which was started by the French government. It has been estimated that, by the late 1800's approximately 3 million people were lifted out of poverty at the end of the industrial revolution.
As a result
, people started spending more and
this
led to the
development
of many of the modern industries we see today.
However
, I would argue that just by only focusing on education; will not lead to the overall
development
of a
society
.
For instance
, it was a painting of Da Vinci that later inspired the Right brothers to develop the
first
aeroplane in the early 1900's. Over the years, communities have always used painting and other
art
installations as a symbol to voice their opinion against injustice in the
society
.
Hence
, In is very important to have an ample budget for the
development
of
art
in a region. In conclusion,
although
education is the cornerstone for the
development
of a
society
, it is
also
important to preserve and develop
art
of a region
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