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The government should lower the budget on the arts in order to allocate more money to education. To what extent do you agree?

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It is clear that,
art
 in many ways represents a mirror to the
society
 and has great cultural significance.
However
, many people believe, the government should stop funding the
art
 projects and redirect
this
 budget to develop the educational system of our country. I personally do not agree with
this
 argument, and through
this
 essay I will support my views with examples. A strong educational system leads to the
upliftment
 and growth of a
society
.
For example
, the main driver behind the industrial revolution of 1800's, was because of the educational reforms which was started by the French government. It has been estimated that, by the late 1800's approximately 3 million people were lifted out of poverty at the end of the industrial revolution.
As a result
, people started spending more and
this
 led to the
development
 of many of the modern industries we see today.
However
, I would argue that just by only focusing on education; will not lead to the overall
development
 of a
society
.
For instance
, it was a painting of Da Vinci that later inspired the Right brothers to develop the
first
 aeroplane in the early 1900's. Over the years, communities have always used painting and other
art
 installations as a symbol to voice their opinion against injustice in the
society
.
Hence
, In is very important to have an ample budget for the
development
 of
art
 in a region. In conclusion,
although
 education is the cornerstone for the
development
 of a
society
, it is
also
 important to preserve and develop
art
 of a region
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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