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Some people think that everyone has the right to have access to university education, and that government should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays,
university
education
 is essential for getting a well paying job. For
this
 reason, many people believe that government should make
university
education
 free for every student; irrespective of their educational background. I personally tend to agree with
this
 statement, and in
this
 essay I will support my views with examples.
Firstly
, every
year
 government spends huge amount of taxpayer money to maintain and develop universities across India.
For example
, it has been estimated that, the
education
 department of India spends close to Rs. 50 million every
year
 on infrastructure and maintenance for IIT's across India.
As a result
 of
this
 spending, IIT's have become one of the premium engineering institutes in the world with world class labs and faculty. Apart from
this
, every
year
 due to inflation and other market situations cost of maintenance is going up drastically
On the other hand
, the cost of
university
education
 has gone up drastically over the past few years.
For instance
, the average fee for a three
year
 graduate course in an Indian
university
 was approximately Rs. 20,000 in the early 2000's, but
this
 has incrementally increased over the years, and currently, the two
year
 graduate course cost around Rs. 50,000.
As a result
, more and more students; especially from the financially backward families are dropping the idea of
university
education
 and looking at other options. Having looked at both sides of the argument, in my view,
instead
 of completely waiving of the fee, the government should look at subsidising the
university
 fee for student coming from economically backward families
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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