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People sleep less than before in many countries. Why do people sleep less? what effect does it have on an individual and on society.

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In
this
 contemporary era, myriads tend to avoid sleep than when compared a decade ago.
This
 has led to a drastic impact on an individual as well as to the society.
This
 essay will thoroughly analyse the reason behind
this
 concept and the influence it has on a person and to the entire nation. At the outset, masses compete towards the thriving economy depriving sleep in order to increase their living standards. People's bustle life styles have hindered their sleep by engaging in more work hours. Not only is it due to the extra work but
also
 due to the current technological era, technophile have been addicted to the blue light emitted by gadgets which is disrupting their conscious brains.
For example
, it was stated in the daily newspaper on the 21st of June that many business icons
such
 as Dhammika Perera hardly get enough time to sleep due to continuously engage in business developments.
On the other hand
,
this
 could adversely impact the life of a certain individual, lack of sleep could arouse psychiatric issues within a person
such
 as anxiety and immense stress. To cite an example, it was reported in a survey held by the university in Colombo that, out of 100 people within a company more than 40% suffer from manifold health issues due to lack of sleep.
Furthermore
,
likewise
 there is a hinder towards an individual, the same applies towards the society. One of which is that due an unhealthy community, the economy will diminish in productivity resulting in an economic decline.
For instance
, if labours lack sleep they would not have a clear-mind to engage in their specialized jobs, reducing their efficiency. In conclusion, many deprive sleep in order to exponentially increase their disposable income.
However
, there are manifold repercussions involved towards an individual and the society which would cause serious health issues and reduce the productivity in the economy.

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