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Some people fear that technology is gradually taking over control of our lives, while others think that it has led to many positive developments in all aspects of their lives. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Several people have got fear that modern
technology
 has taken over control of our lives;
however
, others think that it is a progressive development. In my opinion, the latest inventions have made lives easier than ol
der-d
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the old
ays. According to some, everybody is spending a sedentary lifestyle, only because of the cutting-edge inventions of
technology
, which is really harmful to everyone. It is because everyone is totally depending on the electronic appliances in their daily routine and in
this
 condition, no one has to
do work h
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worked
ard. Take el
ectronic sweep a
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an electronic sweep
s an example because of
this
 invention, women do not have to move a lot like in
o
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an
ld-ages when the people had to sweep with the besom. It was the best way to clean home as well as to have ex
ercise t
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exercised
hemselves.
In addition
 to
this
, grinder, mixer, and the microwave ha
s made t
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have made
hem sluggish. Since they are not working actively. From ot
hers perspective;
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the user's perspective
the others perspective
technology
 is a blessing, since it has reduced the distances and anxiety. Because of the latest inventions, people can connect with those family members who are away from home in a couple of seconds
instead
 of waiting for a long period of
time
.
For instance
, there are a lot of applications through which everyone can communicate with their loved-once within a single click.
Such
 as zoom-cloud, through which people can not only convey their me
ssages but
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messages, but
also
 can see each other. I
also
 agree with those who are in fa
vor o
promote over another
favour
f the uses of the modern
technology
 because the latest inventions really help us a lot to save
time
 and money. As we can get accurate results within a short period of
time
 in
this
 way we do not have to waste hu
ge amount o
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huge amounts
a huge amount
f money as well.
For instance
, in my own office when we used to work manually it took almost 2 weeks to complete the ta
sk but n
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task, but
ow with the help of a computer/laptop we are now completing same tasks within few hours. To conclude with that,
however
 newest invention of machines ha
ve made t
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has made
he people slow-moving, it is useful and be
st way t
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the best way
o save
time
 slots and money. I
also
 in a fa
vor o
promote over another
favour
f uses of
technology
.
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