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That the government should be responsible for the education of it's citizen while others feel that they shud pay for their own education. Discuss both views and give ur opinion

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It is often thought by some that it is the responsibility of the Government to provide
education
 for its citizen.
However
, some proportion of the society has the
view
 that that
education
 should be paid for by people benefitting from it. In my opinion, I believe that paying the bill of
education
 should be solely done by the people in order for them to appreciate it more. Those that are of the
view
 that the Government should sponsor educating its subject believe so because
education
 is one of the basic and essential things for a growing nation.
This
 means that the lack of educated people due to unavailability of the fund might result in an undeveloped society. According to a recent survey carried out by the Ministry of
Education
 in China found out that 80% of developed nations have an increasing number of elite people compared to those that do not have.
Also
, they believe it is right of the citizen to get free
education
 from the fund generated from tax since they are the people that pay the tax.
On the other hand
, those are of the
view
 that it is citizen responsibilities to fund their schooling and I agree to it. We believe that if people will place better value in what they. Pay for unlike getting it free of charge.
In other words
, people tend to appreciate what they have to work hard to earn, and
education
 is not an exception.
For example
, studies have shown that most students in the private school excel well compared to students from Government-owned school,
this
 is because they are footing the bill themselves.
Furthermore
, it is believed that the Government has more pressing things to focus on
,
Accept space
,
such
 as, health and security issues in the nation,
hence
 individuals should bear the cost of schooling. To conclude, While people have a varying opinion, I am of the
view
 that people should be responsible for funding their
education
 for them to appreciate it better.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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