The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.

The table shows the
data
the specified day of the month
date
of Manchester University
student
enrolment in the years 1937, 1967 and 2017 and compares the percentage female and male
student
, outside
Manchester region
Suggestion
the Manchester region student
student
and overseas
student
.
Amount
Suggestion
The amount
of
student
that enrolled over a period increased significantly,
three fold
three times as great or many
threefold
between 1937 and 1967, and
five fold
having five units or components
fivefold
between 1967 and 2017. The percentage of female and male
student
over
period 30 years
Suggestion
a period 30 years
the period 30 years
were dominated by male, 55% in 1937 and 65% in 1967, while in 2017, percentage changed dramatically, which is dominated by female around 55%. The
student
came from Manchester became decreasing significantly over a period 80 years, which is 55
%
Accept comma addition
%, then
then
felt
cause to fall by or as if by delivering a blow
fell
to 1-2% in 2017. And it was strengthened with
upward amount
Suggestion
the upward amount
of
oversease
Suggestion
overseas e
students with various countries. Just over 6% (4 countries) in 1937, 7% (26 countries) and 32% (102 countries).
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