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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree to this statement?

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There is a book by the name of ‘paradoxes of choices’ which notices the different choices we can select in our daily routine. As same as the book, I agree with the statement that people have lots of selections these days,
although
 it can be wrong in some cases. In
this
 essay the different ideas about the subject will be discussed. On
one
 side, everybody expects to find their interests considering the diversity of products. Various manufacturers try to cover numerous tastes of human by their products so, it can help to find the
one
 which fits for everyone.
In addition
 to that, wide range of cultures obligates producers to find suitable choices for each society separately. Religions,
for instance
, somehow are the cause of selecting the clothes in different countries.
Therefore
, people can find what appropriate for their manners when there are several selections available. On the other side, sometimes designers think closely to each other so it is true that some people believe that they do not enough choices. Consider cell phones today and compare their designs with 10 years ago. At that time there were round, square, and even triangle shapes,
although
 it changes to rectangular full touch screen mobiles which are totally the same today.
Thus
, we cannot in some cases factories force us to change our tastes by producing similar products. To summarize, if we try to find various choices around us, it can be confusing to select
one
 of them.
However
, by thinking deeper on
this
 issue will depict us that there are not various choices in everything. People should know their real needs and search for the aspect which are vital for finding the best
one
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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