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Famous people sometimes give their opinions on public topics. Is this a good thing? Explain to what extent you agree or disagree.

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Celebrities often give their thoughts on general topics. Sometimes it is not suitable for the public.
This
 essay agrees with the statement because many people admire them, and their opinions can have equal implications on both sides. On the one hand, celebrities are popular and famous. They are role models for many people who admire them for who they are, and they have a mass appeal, which can help their messages reach out to audiences easily.
Also
, many youngsters blindly try to replicate their role models on what they say and follow.
For instance
, a famous Bollywood Star started a cleanliness campaign in Mumbai, India, requesting people to start cleaning their neighbourhoods. Around 100,000 people, mostly teenagers, participated in
this
 campaign, which was tremendous support for any campaign organized. In a country like India, where most of the population is youth, the opinions of superstars can have a huge impact
On the other hand
, famous personalities should act responsibly when discussing public issues.
That is
 to say that people under limelight should give their opinions keeping public interests in mind. Wrong statements can lead to the instigation of violence and
indifferences
Suggestion
in differences
 in society.
For example
, if an actor supports a particular religion on any social issue,
this
 can create social differences with another segment of people and can lead to violence in the worst-case-scenario.
Therefore
, famous people should be sensible when talking on public platforms about critical subjects. In conclusion,
although
 celebrities have a good reach out to the public, I believe they should restrain from speaking out on public issues without much knowledge about the topics.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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