Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages. Do you agree or disagree? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car

In our lives, we move from one place to another one for various reasons. While travelling, with developing the technology we are becoming dependent on
vehicles whether
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vehicles, whether
it is private
car
or public bus.
Besides owing
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Besides, owing
to a
car
brings some drawbacks, it has
greatly
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great
greater
benefits and
that is
why the number of the
car
owner is increasing every day. The main advantages of owing to a personal
car
are it gives the freedom of travelling. The person can become flexible about
destination
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the destination
destinations
, timetable or routes where will go and
also
will not have to set the
time according
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time, according
to the schedule of public
transportation
, wait for hours, stop every station to arrive the location.
Therefore it
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Therefore, it
ensures to travel comfortably in many ways.
Moreover
, a
car
-owner can take people who want to attend the journey with the goods
on the contrary
to public
transportation
. In terms of benefits, sometimes personal
car
might be cheaper, more safety and
more comfortable
Suggestion
more comfort
.
On the other hand
, owing to a
car
has some disadvantages as well.
First
of all private
car
require
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requires
the garage place and parking issues.
Furthermore
, it
can not
can not
cannot
carry many passengers at a
time even
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time, even
if occupy spaces in the street. As the number of cars is increasing on the road so does the traffic jam and
also
is the huge damage to human health and the environment.
the
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The
more cars mean more air pollutions. Perhaps the major drawbacks of owing to a
car
are more expensive for a person who could have easily available public
transportation
.
If
refers to the speaker or writer
I
would have to travel alone, the cost per person might be
economic
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economical
. To sum up, I think the private
car
is a very useful vehicle that offers more advantages to its owner.
However
, the environmental issues as much as the expense of using cars should not be ignored if the public
transportation
system is accessible and efficient.
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