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Effects of migration on migrants as well as the home country, write both view and your opinion

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In recent years, many people from developing countries have moved to
developed
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developing
 nations for the better future;
however
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, many consider
this
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 trend brings more negative impacts on the
home
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country
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 of the migrants. In my opinion, I consider
this
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 can be beneficial to those who move away from
home
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country
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, whereas the
country
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 would loss its human resource significantly. On the one hand, as a migrant, they would get better facilities in their host
country
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, which means, they would be provided with better living standard: well paid job, social security benefits, free
educaction
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
 for children, career development trainings and so on.
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, in their
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home land
the country where you were born
homeland
, they might be
suffered
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suffering
 from injustice, political conflicts, unrest and violence, so they try to escape from
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 situations.
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, experts may not be treated with respect and high positions. These all situations make them leave
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country
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the country
 for the bright future not only for them, but for their children as well, Despite the above mentioned merits of the migration in people,
this
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 has extremely damaging effects on the
home
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country
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.
This
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 is because they loss talented experts
,
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,
both professionals and skilled labours, which means
brain
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the brain
 draining. In many
nations they
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nations, they
 give free
eduaction
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
 to young children, which requires a huge amount of fund which is allocated from their national income, but later on these students leave the
country
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 for
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 place. Apart from
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, whoever loss its human
resouce
available source of wealth; a new or reserve supply that can be drawn upon when needed
resource
resources
 who significantly goes backward in their vital fields
such
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 as science,
reseach
systematic investigation to establish facts
research
, medical and engineering field; eventually,
this
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 puts the nation into deep financial strain. By way of conclusion, even though leaving the
country
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 is beneficial for people,
this
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 may be deleterious for the
peolpe’s
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people’s
 own
country
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. It is predicted, people be provided with better service and facilities to stop
this
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, before the situation getting worse.
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