Some people think that the Olympics is no longer important in the 21st century. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, Many nations receive funds from richer countries,

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international aid is highly significant for economically deprived ones;

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, some experts think that

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assistances would bring more damaging effects on these nations than any benefits it might provide. In my opinion, I strongly support

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viewpoint.

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of all, by providing financial support,

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only creates dependency towards those who fund them.

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may not be effectively tackled the problems. As a citizen, most of them do not feel to find solutions for their difficulties since they are continuously getting aid.

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, if they do not provide any helps, they would find solutions for the challenges of their surroundings and work to overcome it by a joint

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. Take Kenya as an example, which has

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financial assistances from various countries, but they did not improve their economical status, remains still

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relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply

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. Another possible issue here is that several countries are severely corrupted;

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, whatever money they get from international community may not reach to the hands of needy people. In

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situation, the rich become rich and the poor become poor, the gap between rich and poor widens.

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may not be feasible for a thriving society.

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, experts believe that building educational institutions, hospitals, and

infrastrucures

the basic structure or features of a system or organization

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would be even better to

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give moral or psychological support, aid, or courage to

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poor nations, rather than squandering money for them. By way of conclusion, even though some advocates think that supporting poor countries with money would be better, others think that it can have more damaging effects than any positives.

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, again reaffirm that these countries need to be helped by giving training and technical expertise.