Some people say that the best way to improve public health is b increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

initially
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Initially
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
strangly
with strength or in a strong manner
strongly
believe that sport is very important of
maters
a vaguely specified concern
matters
which of them, not only can keep healthy society but
also
they can help to
rise
raise the level or amount of something
raise
yourth
a young person (especially a young man or boy)
youth
out
your
better than
past
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the past
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
let you know more about me and how
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think about
this
subggect
the subject matter of a conversation or discussion
subject
.
Increasing number
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An increasing number
Increasing numbers
The increasing number
of sport facilities
is
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are
the easy path for the
gavernmets
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government's
governments
for keeping
bith
two things or people together
both
bait
birth
heath
a form of energy that is transferred by a difference in temperature
heat
and safe their
society but
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society, but
the govern have to look
to
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for
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
opinions.
at
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At
first
, I want to see
first
point of view about
incearsing sport fasility
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an increasing sport facility
increasing sport fasility
increasing sport facility
incearsing sport facility
is enough. I think that they as parents or adults who have
responsiblity
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
in the their family, have many
concern
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concerns
about their
yourth
a young person (especially a young man or boy)
youth
member in the own
self family
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self, family
, they believe that by
inceasing
becoming greater or larger
increasing
safe area which young people can spend more their time in there, it can help them to decrease of attending in the worse friend gathering.
on
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On
the
othe
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
hand,
secend
coming next after the first in position in space or time or degree or magnitude
second
group
believe
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believes
that
this
motiveit
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motive, it
motive it
is not
adequat
having the requisite qualities or resources to meet a task
adequate
for making
health society
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health, society
becouse
for the reason that; on account of
because
they think about those
place
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places
whithout
in absence of
without
concedering
deem to be
considering
young
peolpe
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person
people
person's
needs, are not
usefull
being of use or service
useful
and they say before of any moving and thinking about
this
problem, it is better to significant to
haighest
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the highest
highest
required by young
peaple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
.
to
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To
concloud
decide by reasoning; draw or come to a conclusion
conclude
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
have a same idea about
neccessary
absolutely essential
necessary
about measuring all of the
peroblasms
a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved
problems
,
lacks
tell anonymously
leaks
or needs
that is
why
this
result can help us to both make a
best
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better
good
way and
dession
make or work out a plan for; devise
design
.

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