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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can do governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Behaviour of humans contributes to destroy the
environment
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. There are some people's habits that made
environment
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 become worse and result a pollution of
air
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, water and soil.
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, the using of car with fossil fuel in their daily activity, made the
air
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 become polluted. Rain acid and dirty
air
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 are some effect that caused by
pollutant
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 gas, which is resulted by car. The
air
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pollutant
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 are not good for the people’s health.
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, home wastes that do not recycle and the using of bottle, bag and stuffs from plastic materials, made the water and soil pollution. There is a circumstance in the
sea
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, that some animal
sea
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 are trapped in plastic trash,
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 it will be disturbed their habitat.
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, the metal
pollutant
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 from factories that flow to the
sea
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 will be deposited in the bottom of the
sea
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, which it is absorbed by fishes. As we know, the fishes will be consumed by people and it will affected to the people’s health caused by metal
pollutant
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 in the body. If
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 situation do not repair, it will happen environmental destruction. And the degree of people’s wealth will be decreased. So, we should do something to prevent it. Government's role is needed to make a regulation about the rehabilitation of the
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. Things that government should be done,
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 make limited using of car and plastic stuffs in some government laws that should be done by the people. Individual have to aware of their
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. At least with the rubbish that resulted in their home could be recycled by themselves. They have to separate the rubbish into organic and inorganic waste. The organic waste could be recycled become fertilizers and used it for farming.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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