Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some would argue that young people should be taught about how to become an ethical individual in society by their parents. Others claim that it is a responsibility of the education institute. I, personally, believe that parent are the most important people in the children’s
life
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because they spend most of their time with them and they always try to copy their parents instinctively. On the one hand, some people say that teachers are responsible to make children to become a successful person of the society because they argue that parents pay huge amount of money to school to make their children a better person. They believe that teachers are the people who should teach their pupils about self-management skills. And those schools who teach
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skills to their students
then
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those students become successful in
future
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the future
and make their schools proud.
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, a recent survey of The University of Karachi found that 70% students who get
international scholarship
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an international scholarship
from Pakistan went to The City School or Beconhouse Schooling System.
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, others argue that parents have made more impact on children’s
life
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because children spend most of their time with parents. They go to the school just for 6 hours.
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, they watch their parents since they have born and try to copy their parents without any teaching, they believe that what their parents do is the acceptable thing.
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, recent research revealed that 80% of the boys who smoke in their teenage
life
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get influenced by their fathers. In conclusion,
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a lot of people argue that schools are responsible to make their pupils a beneficial member of the society because they are paid for it, I believe that guardians are the most important factor in children’s
life
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because children follow their parents more than anyone else.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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