More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at tl1e place. Why do you think this is happening? Is it a positive or a negative trend?

it has been noticed that the trend of capturing
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at famous and iconic places has increased
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of knowing about the historical and cultural significance of that location. Online presence is the major underlying cause behind
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increasing tendency to take
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of themselves at popular places which is a negative move. I will explain the reasons in detail
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the negative approach in the upcoming paragraphs.
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technological advancements, everyone has access to mobile phones, portable cameras, microphones, the Internet etcetera. The ease of clicking
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and making videos has surged the inclination to focus on themselves irrespective of appreciating the significance of that location.
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, with the urge to have more followers, and hope to earn more money through social media accounts
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as Facebook, Instagram, TikTok and so on, the number of social media influencers has increased tremendously. Thereby, for the desire of social validation in the form of likes and comments, visitors are more focused on taking stunning images of themselves at the landmarks which undermined the purpose of visiting a place to enjoy its scenery
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and know about the history and culture. The above-mentioned reasons have negative impacts on tourism's significance in exploring the world
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because if the person is preoccupied with mobile phones and cameras, they are reflecting a superficial engagement with the culture and history.
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, lack of understanding about the educational and emotional values of that tourist site, they could not actually
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the trip.
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, if the famous figure visited any place and shared their
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and videos on social platforms, there are likely chance of travelling to that place by the number of other visitors. The use of flash photography, touching delicate artefacts, and the increasing commuters crowd are deteriorating the significant tourists' sites, and have a negative
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for those who really wish to deeply
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the importance of that destination. In conclusion, I would wrap up my essay by saying that social media presence and blogging culture
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ever-rise the photo-capturing trend at popular tourist hotspots, resulting in, degrading the beauty of those sites, ruining the tourist
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of real visitors, and reducing the importance of tourism which is discovering the world,
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behaviour should be stopped which is in the best interests of others.

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Consider providing more specific examples to illustrate your points. For instance, you could mention a specific famous site where this trend is particularly evident or refer to statistics on social media usage among tourists.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly relates to your thesis statement. This will help maintain a clear focus throughout the essay. You might want to clarify how the aspects you discuss relate back to the overall argument that this trend is negative.
task achievement
Your introduction effectively sets the stage for the discussion by clearly stating the trend and your stance on it.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion succinctly summarizes your main points and restates the broader implications of the trend discussed, making your perspective clear.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • selfie
  • social media
  • influencer
  • validation
  • personal branding
  • cultural significance
  • historical context
  • photography
  • commodification
  • narrative
  • experience
  • landmark
  • consumer experience
  • instant gratification
  • aesthetic
  • capturing moments
  • superficiality
  • exploration
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