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Some people are fond of buying new gadgets, phones or laptops. Is this a good or bad thing? Discuss your opinion.

#people #gadgets #phones #laptops
With the unprecedented development in the terms of technology, population is getting number of options in electronic devices and smart phones. In my opinion, the habit of buying
such
 things more and more cuts both the ways and I with share my views regarding the same in the subsequent paragraphs. To start with the advantages of purchasing new gadgets or computers after some time.
First
 and foremost which comes to mind is, people become familiar with new technology. For an example, with the passage of time there are
number
Suggestion
a number
 of changes which could be seen in the computers. Earlier, the size of
computer
Suggestion
the computer
 was so big that it was difficult to
hold but
Accept comma addition
hold, but
 now people can travel along with the pocket size computers called Macbooks.
Also
, list of softwares are launched which were not available in the old mobile phones and gadgets. To
examplify
be characteristic of
exemplify
,
thesedays
Suggestion
these days
 a famous gadget called Alexa is very famous
amoung
in the middle of
among
 the people because of its updated software.
On the other hand
, there are various disadvantages
also
.
Firstly
,
population
Suggestion
the population
 is becoming very crazy about these new developments that they are becoming more careless about the money. Without knowing the fact that the amount which they are spending on
such
 things that amount can be utilized for their better future. To illustrate, they can spend money to get
good education
Suggestion
a good education
.
Next
, for more sale sellers of these products are taking every possible step to
mold
form in clay, wax, etc
mould
 the customers. They are not concerned about their money and launching copies of
such
 products in the market. To illustrate, there are various Chinese products in the market which are
exactly
Suggestion
exact
 copy of
originals
Suggestion
the originals
. In crux, the demerits of buying
such
 products are more than the merits. But,
this
 fact can
also
 not to be ignored that they are very useful and it is
also
 important to use them efficiently.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology advancements
  • convenience
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • status symbol
  • financial burden
  • obsession
  • impulsive
  • consumerism
  • sustainability
  • e-waste
  • environmentally friendly
  • second-hand market
  • repairability
  • upgradability
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