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Because of the busy pace of modern life, many children spend most of their time indoors and have little exposure to the natural world. How important is it for children to learn to understand and appreciate nature? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Children, nowadays, are spending nearly all their time inside buildings
as a result
 of the busy pace of contemporary life.
This
 essay will argue that it is of utmost importance that young children are taught to value our natural habitat so that they will protect it as adults, and
also
 for their improved health.
Firstly
, growing children who learn to love
nature
 are likely to take actions to protect it as adults.
This
 is especially important, given the rate at which deforestation, urbanization and other practices which erode the natural environment are taking place in modern times. Because children would become the adults of tomorrow who would be in the position to make decisions that would safeguard or
further
 cause harm to
nature
,
then
 teaching them early to love and value it would be beneficial to our world.
For example
, studies conducted recently by National Geographic, have shown that children who visit zoos and aquariums or who go camping in
nature
, frequently, are 60 times more likely to become
nature
 activists and conservationists, than children who do not.
Secondly
, spending time in
nature
 contributes to the well being of people, including children and adolescents.
This
 is because activities which take place out in
nature
,
such
 as walking, hiking, climbing, and swimming, are physically exerting
thus
 helps them maintain fitness.
Furthermore
, recent studies have shown that people who breathe cleaner and fresher air regularly, are expected to live 7 years longer than those who do not. In conclusion, it is highly essential that children are taught to understand and esteem the natural world as they are the earth's future protectors, and spending time in the natural habitat contributes to their overall health.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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