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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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A true relationship between people requires
face
 to
face
 communication and time to truly get to know each other. There are many ways that
technology
 affects our relationships, and in my opinion,
this
 is a beneficial development.
To begin
 with, the most obvious transformation in people relationship in how they communicate with
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
.
Internet
Suggestion
The internet
 has converted around the
world even
Accept comma addition
world, even
 though to a small town and village where
this
 becomes
life style
Suggestion
a life style
 to use
technology
 for communication.
For instance
, one of my
friend
Suggestion
friends
 who lives in Indonesia and have a boyfriend from
UK
Suggestion
the UK
 can easily have a chat and call each other using mobile phone or social network.
Furthermore
,
technology
 affects our life where people can make
friend
 from around the world.
In other words
, make a
friend
 from other countries can develop
people
Suggestion
peoples
person's
 knowledge about other
nationalities culture
Accept comma addition
nationalities, culture
, food, traditional festivals, and languages.
In addition
, the lives of peoples turned out to be easier and the communication among people become easier and more convenient. People could spend more time
to
Suggestion
with
 their families and
friend
 using telecommunication and video call using services over the countries.
Consequently
, it changed the way people contact each other and
also talking each
Suggestion
also talking to each
 other in
face
Suggestion
a face
 to
face
 method rarely.
For example
, parents will feel more secure when they have to leave their kids to study overseas for their future career. Parents
also
 can keep
on
indefinite article, "an" is use before a vowel sound, "a" otherwise
an
 eye to their
children
Suggestion
children's
 activities and friends from social media. In conclusion,
technology
have
Suggestion
has
 more positive developments and
has affects
Suggestion
has affected
is affecting
affected
 the relationships between people. In fact,
technology
 has enhanced our
life
Suggestion
lives
 and the way we are contacting each other.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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