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International travel is becoming cheaper and more countries are opening their doors to increase the number of tourists. Do the advantages of increased tourism outweigh the disadvantages.

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In
this
 new era of civilization, there is an increase in the number of nations that now open their entrance to many tourists as international travel has become cheaper. In my opinion, despite the benefits of job opportunities as well as an increase in the economic growth from the rise in the number of tourists, the drawbacks of
this
 are greater than them. Admittedly, having growing tourism has some advantages.
Firstly
, opportunities in employment occur when nations doors are opened to visitors due to the rise in the need for human labour to meet up with the demands of efficiently running the tourist centres.
This
 will result in a rapid and an eventual boost of the standard of living of the citizens.
Moreover
, there would
also
 be a drastic growth in the economy of
such
 a country.
This
 is because huge re
sources received f
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resources, received
rom the payment of taxes and other means of generating funds would raise enough revenue for the government.
Nevertheless
, there are several demerits of growing tourism that are detrimental, both to the environment and people living there.
To begin
 with, an increase in pollution which occurs from the frequent use of cars to commute tourists in and out of the country is the main problem of
this
 growth.
In other words
, there is an emission of carbon dioxide from the automobiles, thereby leading to the rising sea level.
This
 could lead to serious disasters, especially flood which could lead to loss of properties and death of many innocent lives. Another drawback is the loss of morals, which is common amongst the citizens owing to the wrongful exposure to visitors, who are tourists.
As a result
, the ethics of
such
 a nation would be lost. In conclusion,
although
 there are many merits of opening countries doors to improve tourism, the demerits of the threat of global warming from air pollution and loss of morals cannot be overlooked as these could be dangerous to both the population and the nation safety.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • local businesses
  • job creation
  • cultural understanding
  • stereotypes
  • global connections
  • infrastructure
  • public transportation
  • environmental degradation
  • pollution
  • deforestation
  • wildlife habitats
  • commercialization
  • cultural identity
  • overcrowding
  • quality of life
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