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Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries.What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Nowadays many
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Nowadays, many
 global companies are setting up their
buisnesses
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
businesses
business
 in developing countries.These benefits us by giving employment opportunities.But it hampers the growth of domestic companies. The main advantage of the rise in transnational companies is that it reduces
unemployment rate
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the unemployment rate
 because to run companies offices and factories it requires the candidates.
This
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 will assist jobless peoples to grab the opportunity and helps in earning and making future bright.For an illustration, a recent survey conducted in
Bangalore which
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Bangalore, which
 shows
surprising result
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the surprising result
 that with the growth of multinational
companies
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companies'
 employment rate Rises by 40%. Despite the benefits of transnational companies, it
cause
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causes
 severe disruptions in the Nations own companies.Because with advanced machines and technologies in multinational companies they can make products at
fast pace
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a fast pace
 with cheap
prices which
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prices, which
 affects sales of the domestic companies which can put
drastic impact
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a drastic impact
 on the country's economy. Conclusion
,
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,
multinationals
provide
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provides
 employment
opportunities but
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opportunities, but
 at the same time they can affect local companies with their low prices and high production.
Government
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The government
 should have to survive in the cut throat competition.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Multinational corporations (MNCs)
  • Foreign direct investment (FDI)
  • Developing economies
  • Infrastructure development
  • Capacity building
  • Cultural diversity
  • Sustainability
  • Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
  • Technological transfer
  • Economic disparity
  • Market saturation
  • Brain drain
  • Indigenous industries
  • Expatriate management
  • Trade imbalance
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