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Families are not as close as they used to be before. What do you think are the causes of this. What can be done to make family closer

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To introduce, Modern family relations have been diminished when compared to the past days. There may be different reasons for
this
 drop down as well, as there will be many ways to increase the relationship,
such
 as spending the days with them, being in touch with them. We would be discussing the causes of not being together, and ideas to make the family to get closer, yet providing the ideas to have happy relations.
Although
 citizens belong to the same family, they would act as these are not related to each other, and there are many factors describing
this
. A good starting point to discuss would be insufficient time spent with the family members, and it leads to misunderstanding of avoiding each other.
In addition
 to
this
, some crew may have issues with assets, so they will be having a silent war among themselves. Turning to the methods to make these relatives come closer, it can be seen that there would be many solutions to make it possible. We will discuss about some of the possibilities to avoid those problems between them.
To begin
 with, we should have a meet up at least once within a week,
for example
 going to picnics, having some fun along with them, etc.
Also
 worth to reduce the asset clashes amongst them. To summarize, Relationship's will have life only when the crew spend's some time with other's.
Therefore
, It would be nice to be with them,
although
 we are busy.
Hence
, relationships live only people stay with each other and if they do not fight for money.
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